I would say something here but it'd require drawing all you bastards again. :P

This was fantastic for your first animation. Well done Lip. :D

Kinda feel I should actually post some more on the forum to join in these shenanigans.

Very creative.

I like how this game works. Kept me entertained for abit and got me thinking about how to draw.
It's a shame I have unsteady hands and I'm using a mouse.
Still very good, I doubt it'll have any problems going through judgement. :P

Action Scripting good, the rest, not so good

You obiviously got the grips of action scripting and I can see you mean to tell a good (if angsty) story with this. But frankly the art style was lacking, there wasn't any animation and the music is the same bull you hear in every "deep" game.
My suggestion is too continue working with flash fleshing out your skills before attempting to continue this.
Now this isn't me telling you to give up. Just keep practising. :P

Very thoughtfull but...

...this just isn't made for newgrounds.

We're all so cute and adorable. :D